Wednesday, August 20, 2014

Week 1 Storytelling: The Flag Pole and The Marble Slab

A Giant Oak stood near a brook in which grew some
slender Reeds.

When the wind blew, the great Oak stood proudly
upright with its

hundred arms uplifted to the sky. But the Reeds
bowed low in the wind and sang a sad and mournful song.

(The Oak and the Reeds)
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A giant Flag Pole stood in the center of a town next to a Marble Slab. The Flag Pole held the flag of the town high in the sky, for everyone who lived there to see. The Slab was laid in the ground next to the Pole, and could only be seen if a person was standing near. 
The people of the town decided to record the history of the town on a special flag. The flag was decorated with expensive materials to show off the wealth of the town. The town elders spared no expense, and the flag was the grandest thing anyone had ever seen. Once the flag was raised to the top of the pole, it was visible from around the countryside. 
All of the craftsmen in the town had worked on the flag except for one, the town mason. The mason’s family had kept the town’s history on the Slab for many generations. The Slab was plain and without decoration, and the people of the town gave no thanks to the mason nor attention to the Slab.
One afternoon a mighty storm suddenly came through the town. The people had no warning, and no time to lower the flag from the Pole. As the storm passed over the center of the town, the flag was ripped from the Pole and torn to pieces by the wind. 
When the storm was over, the people of the town emerged gasped at the sight of the empty Pole. The people of the town were in anguish, fearing the rich and noble history of their town lost forever. The mason stepped forward and reminded the people that all the history was recorded on the Slab.
The people of the town thanked the mason for ensuring the history would survive, and vowed to never again make such a wonderful flag that would be at the mercy of the cruel wind.
Author's Note: This story was inspired by the fable "The Oak And The Reeds" which is quoted before my story. The original fable can be found in the book Aesop For Children, illustrated by Milo Winter (1919). My story is a different take on the original where something that seems mighty and grand is not so in reality.

4 comments:

  1. I really liked the idea of a town seeking to record its history in some kind of grand monument, which is a flag in this case. It was a creative way of retelling the original fable. The idea of going with the flow reminds me of some of the Daoist teachings I learned about in my Eastern Philosophies class. For a Daoist the goal is to be passive--to go with the flow rather than fight against the current--and to find contentedness through non-action. Good stuff. I'm sure I'll be reading some of your stuff in the future, so keep up the good work, man!

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  2. I like your story a lot! It was very clever of you to make your story about a flag pole and slab, it made the overall message very clear to the audience. This reminds me of a quote I read once, "Strength is not measured by appearance, but by endurance" (I have no idea who said it.)
    A little dialogue to go along with your story would have been nice but overall it was very creative! Good job!

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  3. I liked how you changed the central "characters" in this story (from an oak and reeds to a flagpole and a slab). The change put a slightly different spin on the story and really elucidated the central tenet of the tale. I agree with Carrie in that some dialogue would have helped to move the story along a little more, but you did a fantastic job with your first story--regardless of how difficult it may have seemed to you!

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  4. Barclay, you wrote very eloquently throughout your story. I particularly enjoyed the ending when the town came together to discover the demolished pole and slab. Your rendition of this fable was very thought provoking and wise. Nice job. One thing I think you could improve on for next time would be to add some dialogue between characters. Overall, great job!

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